My thoughts turn to you-
The first love of my life...
I was young and naive,
But I was too much in love..
You were dark and handsome,
Majestic, and awesome...
I could not be away from you -
Every day I came running to you...
We spent hours together,
For me, you were always there
You lend me your ears,
And wiped away my tears...
When I heard your sound,
My heart used to pound...
I played with you, talked to you
I cried on you, and laughed too..
I couldn't think of a life without you
I thought I would die without you...
Yet when the years passed by,
We also parted and fell by...
Now when I see your cousins
Roaring down the roads herein,
My heart skips a beat and I
Fervently flashes over my eye
How I wish I could mount you
And talk till I fall asleep on you;
How I wish I could ride you
And feel the thrill of being with you....
To remember the good old days
When we were together always;
Now, how can I ever forget
My first love -my dear old Bullet!!!
The first love of my life...
I was young and naive,
But I was too much in love..
You were dark and handsome,
Majestic, and awesome...
I could not be away from you -
Every day I came running to you...
We spent hours together,
For me, you were always there
You lend me your ears,
And wiped away my tears...
When I heard your sound,
My heart used to pound...
I played with you, talked to you
I cried on you, and laughed too..
I couldn't think of a life without you
I thought I would die without you...
Yet when the years passed by,
We also parted and fell by...
Now when I see your cousins
Roaring down the roads herein,
My heart skips a beat and I
Fervently flashes over my eye
How I wish I could mount you
And talk till I fall asleep on you;
How I wish I could ride you
And feel the thrill of being with you....
To remember the good old days
When we were together always;
Now, how can I ever forget
My first love -my dear old Bullet!!!
Pretty nice . . :) sometimes i do feel d same for my old toys.. Still i kept some safe on my cupboard.. Sometimes i talk to dem sometimes i wished tat if life had a reverse button.. So i can go bak nd tell many tat u were meant so much to me..
ReplyDeleteThanks Winnie! I was very attached to my dad's bike... Missing it badly.
ReplyDeleteNice poem Nishedathi :)
ReplyDeleteKeep writing!
Regards
village girl
I liked the build up of the poem.
ReplyDelete@ Roopz, Thank you... Nice to have you back!
ReplyDeleteMailini Edathi, I am so pleased to know that you liked it... Thank you!!!
ReplyDeletepretty simple and touchy :)
ReplyDeletewell expressed !
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Thanks Deepak for the good words
ReplyDeleteExcellent...I liked the flow and the final blow!!
ReplyDeleteAjoy Sir! Thanks... Had been wanting to write something different for long. And then,this happened!
ReplyDeleteVery Happy to know you liked it :-)
This one's a cracker! The twist in the tale was well delivered. I suddenly became wistful and remembered my first bike.
ReplyDeleteHa ha Ha... everybody seems to have had their imaginations wild in the beginning!! I have not got so many comments for one post! (Guess I am getting into the groove)
ReplyDeleteBut yes, the "first" will always be special - be it a car or bike...
nice one nisha..
ReplyDeleteThank you Anju
ReplyDeleteWell written, Nisha...loved the twist!
ReplyDeleteHappy to see you get connected and becoming one of the clan:)
Thanks Deepa! Glad you liked it...
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ReplyDeleteon reding i feel like paragraph lines experienced quick 'enter'.There was no imagination. was like narrating a situation. nothing interesting.
try better
dear friend
ReplyDeleteon reding i feel like paragraph lines experienced quick 'enter'.There was no imagination. was like narrating a situation. nothing interesting.
try better
Too bad as a poem, feels like a narrating an incident.nothing to say as poem
ReplyDeleteTrickmaster! Thank you very much for your opinion... I dont claim to be an accomplished writer. So, it is quite natural that some people find my writing not interesting. I am glad that you took time to let me know your thoughts.
ReplyDeleteAnd yes, I am striving to be better... Hope that one day you will find something interesting here...
LOL Nisha, super fun poem. I guess guys would love it!
ReplyDeleteSuper cool. Had fun reading it. Would have been even more twisty if the last 4 lines were said before you mentioned bullet.
ReplyDeleteThanks Saru! Glad you liked it...
ReplyDeleteLeo, Thanks! On hind sight, I do agree with you!
ReplyDeleteഅനില് നമ്പൂതിരി മാഷിന്റെ ഒരു കഥയുണ്ട് ഇതിനോട് സാമ്യമുള്ളത്... bullet എന്ന് പറയാതെ തന്നെ അവസാനിപ്പിക്കാമായിരുന്നു.. Really good one.. :)
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