Thursday, December 22, 2011

First Love

My thoughts turn to you-
The first love of my life...
I was young and naive,
But I was too much in love..

You were dark and handsome,
Majestic, and awesome...
I could not be away from you  -
Every day I came running to you...

We spent hours together,
For me, you were always there
You lend me your ears,
And wiped away my tears...

When I heard your sound,
My heart used to pound...
I played with you, talked to you
I cried on you, and laughed too..

I couldn't think of a life without you
I thought I would die without you...
Yet when the years passed by,
We also parted and fell by...

Now when I see your cousins
Roaring down the roads herein,
My heart skips a beat and I
Fervently flashes over my eye

How I wish I could mount you
And talk till I fall asleep on you;
How I wish I could ride you
And feel the thrill of being with you....

To remember the good old days
When we were together always;
Now, how can I ever forget
My first love -my dear old Bullet!!!


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25 comments:

  1. UnknownDecember 22, 2011 at 1:02 AM

    Pretty nice . . :) sometimes i do feel d same for my old toys.. Still i kept some safe on my cupboard.. Sometimes i talk to dem sometimes i wished tat if life had a reverse button.. So i can go bak nd tell many tat u were meant so much to me..

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  2. NishaDecember 22, 2011 at 8:19 AM

    Thanks Winnie! I was very attached to my dad's bike... Missing it badly.

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  3. roopzDecember 22, 2011 at 10:07 AM

    Nice poem Nishedathi :)
    Keep writing!

    Regards
    village girl

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  4. AnonymousDecember 22, 2011 at 1:07 PM

    I liked the build up of the poem.

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  5. NishaDecember 22, 2011 at 1:19 PM

    @ Roopz, Thank you... Nice to have you back!

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  6. NishaDecember 22, 2011 at 1:21 PM

    Mailini Edathi, I am so pleased to know that you liked it... Thank you!!!

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  7. Deepak KarthikDecember 23, 2011 at 12:32 AM

    pretty simple and touchy :)
    well expressed !
    http://www.deepakkarthikspeaks.blogspot.com/

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  8. NishaDecember 23, 2011 at 7:57 AM

    Thanks Deepak for the good words

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  9. M Ajoy KumarDecember 23, 2011 at 8:53 AM

    Excellent...I liked the flow and the final blow!!

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  10. NishaDecember 23, 2011 at 9:31 AM

    Ajoy Sir! Thanks... Had been wanting to write something different for long. And then,this happened!
    Very Happy to know you liked it :-)

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  11. RajeshDecember 23, 2011 at 11:01 AM

    This one's a cracker! The twist in the tale was well delivered. I suddenly became wistful and remembered my first bike.

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  12. NishaDecember 23, 2011 at 11:08 AM

    Ha ha Ha... everybody seems to have had their imaginations wild in the beginning!! I have not got so many comments for one post! (Guess I am getting into the groove)

    But yes, the "first" will always be special - be it a car or bike...

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  13. anjuDecember 23, 2011 at 11:53 AM

    nice one nisha..

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  14. NishaDecember 24, 2011 at 8:52 AM

    Thank you Anju

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  15. Deepa GopalDecember 24, 2011 at 4:13 PM

    Well written, Nisha...loved the twist!
    Happy to see you get connected and becoming one of the clan:)

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  16. NishaDecember 24, 2011 at 9:06 PM

    Thanks Deepa! Glad you liked it...

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  17. Arun kumarDecember 28, 2011 at 2:56 PM

    dear friend
    on reding i feel like paragraph lines experienced quick 'enter'.There was no imagination. was like narrating a situation. nothing interesting.
    try better

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  18. Arun kumarDecember 28, 2011 at 2:57 PM

    dear friend
    on reding i feel like paragraph lines experienced quick 'enter'.There was no imagination. was like narrating a situation. nothing interesting.
    try better

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  19. Arun kumarDecember 28, 2011 at 3:03 PM

    Too bad as a poem, feels like a narrating an incident.nothing to say as poem

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  20. NishaDecember 28, 2011 at 6:09 PM

    Trickmaster! Thank you very much for your opinion... I dont claim to be an accomplished writer. So, it is quite natural that some people find my writing not interesting. I am glad that you took time to let me know your thoughts.
    And yes, I am striving to be better... Hope that one day you will find something interesting here...

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  21. Saru SinghalDecember 29, 2011 at 10:53 AM

    LOL Nisha, super fun poem. I guess guys would love it!

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  22. LeoPawDecember 31, 2011 at 11:05 AM

    Super cool. Had fun reading it. Would have been even more twisty if the last 4 lines were said before you mentioned bullet.

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  23. NishaDecember 31, 2011 at 4:36 PM

    Thanks Saru! Glad you liked it...

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  24. NishaDecember 31, 2011 at 4:37 PM

    Leo, Thanks! On hind sight, I do agree with you!

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  25. Sangeeth vinayakanJuly 22, 2013 at 6:57 PM

    അനില്‍ നമ്പൂതിരി മാഷിന്റെ ഒരു കഥയുണ്ട് ഇതിനോട് സാമ്യമുള്ളത്... bullet എന്ന് പറയാതെ തന്നെ അവസാനിപ്പിക്കാമായിരുന്നു.. Really good one.. :)

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